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Thursday, September 17, 2015

I FINISHED MY MOVIE SCRIPT

Man, I haven't done this in a while. Feels weird, I kind of forget the layout...anyway, back to blogging.

The short explanation for why I haven't posted in so long is that after I converted everything I'd written so far in to a script program, I found that I couldn't copy and paste my work here without all these formatting errors and that was annoying so I decided not to bother.

I kept writing though. I will say this, writing a movie is very hard. If you're someone out there who has decided to write their first script then expect to struggle. Expect to feel like a bum. Writing isn't typing, writing is sitting on your couch staring at a wall and listening to music until an idea hits you. It feels unproductive and all your instincts will tell you to quit and stop wasting your time.

It's not fun, its work. If you're still driven to see your idea through then just keep at it. Remember that even if you're just writing a paragraph everyday then you're slowing getting it finished. Just keep coming back to it, make it a habit, hold yourself accountable. Grind it out and you WILL finish, and when you do it feels pretty cool.

So my script is finished.

Now what?

Wednesday, April 15, 2015

TOM WRITES HIS FIRST MOVIE: All dialogue...blah blah blah.

Douglas and Abigail are in love. Then one morning Douglas finds Abigail standing in the hallway, trembling and terrified. She's standing beside a room. She thinks he did something. Something only a psycho would do.
That's the idea behind the script I am writing, it's my first. I post as I go. Down there is today's entry, all the rest can be found right HERE.



Cont'd...

The officer sees himself out, leaving Abigail and Bryce alone. Abigail is staring into dead space, in thought. Bryce lets her have her silence.

ABIGAIL
I want a gun.

BRYCE
What?

ABIGAIL
I need a gun.

BRYCE
Abby. He's in jail.

ABIGAIL
He won't always be.

BRYCE
He has a restraining order against him now. He can't come anywhere near you.

ABIGAIL
 He's crazy! He doesn't care. Bryce I am not moving, so he's always going to know where I live.

BRYCE
Maybe we should just move you back to your fathers. Just for a bit.

ABIGAIL
Fucking asshole.

BRYCE
Sorry?

ABIGAIL
Douglas. Not pressing charges against my dad, I know what he's doing. He's manipulating me. He's trying to get me to trust him. Piece of shit.

BRYCE
Abby?

ABIGAIL
What?

BRYCE
That night, when Douglas was in your house. What do you think he wanted?

ABIGAIL
Honestly? I think he wanted to kill me.

BRYCE
I don't get why he told you to call the police.

ABIGAIL
Because I scared him. I saw him before he could get me.

BRYCE
Did he look scared?

ABIGAIL
Yeah. I caught his ass and he knew it. So he made up some bullshit story and ran.

BRYCE
If he came here to hurt you then why not hurt you? When you started screaming, why run? Why not attack?

ABIGAIL
What the hell are you saying? 

BRYCE
I am just thinking.

ABIGAIL
What? Someone else was here and poor Douglas was just trying to save me from the dark figure?

BRYCE
No. No! This isn't a movie. Real life doesn't have twists like that. Your ex-fiance actually IS just one of those sick stalkers you read about, that's why this is happening. That's the only reason this is happening.

ABIGAIL
I need a gun.

BRYCE
We'll talk to your father when he gets out. If you still want one, he has lots. 

Abigail give him a half smile.

BRYCE
I am sorry Abby.

ABIGAIL
Wht? It's not your fault.

Con't...

Thursday, January 29, 2015

TOM WRITES HIS FIRST MOVIE: Is This Chick Crazy?

So here's what this is.

I am writing a movie, it's my first. So far a guy moved into his girlfriend's house, loved her madly and then woke up one day to find that she did something totally psycho.

Here's everything so far.

http://tcqscripts.blogspot.ca/2014/12/i-am-not-weirdo.html


Cont'd...

DOUGLAS
Jesus Abby. Are you really crazy?

GRANT
What if she is Doug?

DOUGLAS
Then she'll need my help.

Douglas takes note of Grant's reluctant expression.

DOUGLAS
I was going to propose to this one.
(beat)
I am going to propose to this one.

 GRANT
Dude, don't think like that right now. Think about what you're going to do to get her help, because I really don't know what you can do.

DOUGLAS
Find a doctor...

GRANT
Doctors won't see her unless she wants to be seen. 

DOUGLAS
I'll talk to her.

GRANT
Her dad said he'd kill you if you came back.

DOUGLAS
We'll see if he meant it. I am going back. Fuck him.
 
Grant cracks open another beer. 

GRANT
I think you should walk away, dude. Sorry. I mean; this is some shit.

DOUGLAS
That's not an option. I can't. I love her.

GRANT
 She's bad news Doug. She's crazy. Not just girl "crazy", actual crazy. You can never be comfortable around her after this. You'll never sleep again, god knows what you'd wake up to if you did. IF you wake up!

Douglas fall quiet.

GRANT
I am sorry to say this to you but it needs to be said. This girl just showed you a HUGE red flag...fuck that, this girl just showed you a room full of dolls that she molested. There is no clearer "stay away" sign. That's FUCKED. I didn't want to say this before but I am scared shitless of her now. Seriously. I am glad this happened now, before you got any deeper into this. 

Douglas doesn't respond.

GRANT
I know you loved this girl but...she's dangerous dude. You need to give her space and stay far away.  The wrong woman will fuck up your life, a psycho will shorten your life. Is any of this getting through to you?

DOUGLAS
No.

Cont'd...


Thursday, January 22, 2015

TOM WRITES A MOVIE: Swear and talk it out.

I've been writing my first movie (http://tcqscripts.blogspot.ca/2014/12/i-am-not-weirdo.html).

Each blog entry I ad about a page to it, here's today's installment:


INT - NIGHT - GRANT'S LIVING ROOM

Grant helps Douglas get to the couch where he collapses. Grant tosses him a washcloth to clean himself up with, he heads into the kitchen to get first-aid supplies. Douglas starts to wipe the blood from his face, wincing in pain as he does. Grant re-enters with the first-aid kit, he puts it on the table in front of Douglas and sits down. He struggles to find the right words to say. What do you say to someone who just has his life torn apart?


GRANT
We'll go back. We'll give it some time, let her calm down. Then we'll go back.

Douglas doesn't respond. 

GRANT
Should we call the police.

DOUGLAS.
They'll believe her.

GRANT
I don't even know what we'd tell them. I don't know what this is. What is this?

DOUGLAS
I don't know! I don't know what happened.

GRANT
You didn't see this coming at all?

DOUGLAS
THIS? Did I see THIS happening?

GRANT
Or any indication that something was wrong with her?

DOUGLAS
Nothing's wrong with her. Something happened. She's sick. Maybe she was always sick and never told me. Maybe she was on medication, maybe she stopped taking it.

GRANT
 Wouldn't her dad have known if she needed medication?

DOUGLAS
He probably does.

GRANT
Then why wouldn't he have told you?

DOUGLAS
Because he's s piece of fucking shit.

Douglas's face begins to bleed again as he gets more animated.

DOUGLAS
FUCK!

Grant gets up and leaves the frame, the shot stays tight on Douglas, in the background we hear Grant going though the fridge. He comes back with two cans of beer and hands one to Douglas. Douglas presses the cold can to his swollen face.

GRANT
I am sorry man. I don't know what to say.

DOUGLAS
 ...Fucking dolls.

GRANT
Why do you think she'd do that? What would compel someone to create a scene like that? 

DOUGLAS
You should have seen her face, that's when I knew she wasn't well. The look in her eyes. She really thinks I did that, she's scared of me.

GRANT
You know what the means? She woke up sometime in the night while you were sleeping and crept into the other room, then she tore apart all her dolls, tore apart the whole room, wrote violent things all over the wall, did...sexual things with those dolls and then waited for you to wake up so she could act like she thought you did it.

DOUGLAS
She wasn't acting. She really thinks I did it.

GRANT
That's even scarier Douglas.

Cont'd...

Sunday, January 4, 2015

TOM WRITES HIS FIRST MOVIE: The meat of it.

I've been working on this movie (http://tcqscripts.blogspot.ca/2014/12/i-am-not-weirdo.html). Each blog entry I ad a page, here's today's installment:


EXT - GRANT'S HOUSE.

Grant is sitting in his living room eating a bowl of cereal, he hears the sound of a speeding vehicle getting closer and closer to his house, out the window he sees Douglas's truck pull in. He came in so fast he overshot the driveway and ended up in the middle of Grant's front lawn. Seeing this Grant runs to the front door where he's met by Douglas.


GRANT
What the F...

DOUGLAS
I need help.

GRANT
With what? What is it?

Douglas's eyes become pained.

DOUGLAS
I think Abby's sick

INT - DOUGLAS' SPEEDING TRUCK

Grant is in the passenger seat of Douglas' truck, Douglas speeds out off of Grant's lawn and races back towards Abby's house.

GRANT
Jesus Christ...Abby.

DOUGLAS
It's not her fault. She's sick.

GRANT
Sick how?

DOUGLAS
I don't know!

GRANT
This is so fucked up.

DOUGLAS
I need you to help me calm her down. Just help me talk to her.

GRANT
We should get her father. 

DOUGLAS
His phone's off. I messaged him to meet us there.

GRANT
When did this start?

DOUGLAS
When I saw her in the kitchen a couple weeks ago, she looked scared. She said she found a note. Some fucked up note.

GRANT
What did it say?

DOUGLAS
I don't know! I never saw any note. She said it was angry, and violent. 

GRANT
Do you think there was really a note?

Douglas falls quiet, eyes never off the road.


GRANT
What else?

DOUGLAS
Just weird little things. She said she found broken photos and heard shouting. She's been accusing me of all these strange things lately. Then this.

GRANT
Shit. We'll get her help.


They drive through the night not speaking another word. Pulling onto the lonely road leading up to Abby's house their car is SMASHED from behind by another vehicle, they spin out just outside the driveway. Abigail's father Richard's car screeches to a stop in front of them. Richard steps out of the car and points a shotgun at Douglas's head.

Cont'd...


Friday, December 26, 2014

TOM WRITES HIS FIRST MOVIE: Broach the issue and go on a date.

 Been working on a movie script, it's my first one. One page at a time I am getting it done.


Here's today's entry:



EXT - Restaurant. 

Douglas and Abby are sitting down in a beautifully lit and lively little restaurant on the lake. The lights on the boats behind them make them look like fireflies on the water. A server brings their food, Abby has a light pasta dish, Douglas has a big halibut placed in front of him. The skin looks crispy the meat looks mouth watering, Douglas is almost in disbelief at how good it looks.

DOUGLAS
Oh god. Y'know what, I never take pictures of my food but this is too damn photogenic to not share.

Douglas snaps a pic with his phone.

DOUGLAS
Speaking of photogenic.

Douglas snaps a few pictures of Abby. The camera loves her smile. Her smile fades some.

 ABIGAIL
This is the you I like.

DOUGLAS
You've been so ominous lately. What's up?

ABIGAIL
I feel like I am still learning you.

DOUGLAS
Well...yeah. When you move in with someone you go through this re-discovery period, right? That's normal.

ABIGAIL
I know. 

DOUGLAS
So is it like...I am messy or...?

ABIGAIL
No! It's nothing like that...well, yes you are messy but I knew that when I asked you to move in. It's just...honestly, I found a note you wrote to yourself once. It looked like something you wrote to yourself  when you were feeling annoyed. It was angry, and it was weird to see because I never see that side of you.

DOUGLAS
What are you talking about? The angriest I ever get is when I am losing at video games and you see that all the time. What note?

ABIGAIL
I couldn't even tell you. I read a few lines of it and just crumpled it up and threw it out. It was so angry and violent. It scared me Douglas.

DOUGLAS
A note? Like a handwritten note?

ABIGAIL
Yes.

DOUGLAS
Abby the only handwritten notes I leave lying around would say like..."buy laundry detergent" or "dentist 12:30, Monday". I can't think of anything I'd write that would have freaked you out.

ABIGAIL
It's not just the note. Its other little things like moving my diary and finding this broken picture of me and my family that looked like it had been smashed and then put back on the shelf, and sometimes I here angry shouting...

DOUGLAS
I am a little floored right now. 

ABIGAIL
I didn't want to bring this up tonight. I am sorry.

DOUGLAS
I had no idea any of this was going on. Abby I didn't write any angry notes. I don't know what you saw but it wasn't from me, and I didn't know one of your pictures broke. I didn't do that either. The yelling...that could be me. I don't know. Video games.

ABIGAIL
That note was written on the paper we keep in the kitchen.

DOUGLAS
What? heh...

That one stumps Douglas, it's disturbing.

DOUGLAS
Well maybe your dad wrote it about me. I mean he hates me, any note he wrote about me would be angry and hate filled and scary. Right?

ABIGAIL
Not this kind of angry and it was just sitting out on the counter and he hasn't been here since we moved in. We would have noticed it before if was his.

DOUGLAS
I wish you kept the note and I wish you'd shown me the broken picture because then I could have probably could have proven right then and there that I had nothing to do with any of this.

ABIGAIL
I should have asked you about it but I wanted to just sweep it under the rug and forget about it.

DOUGLAS
I am sorry you saw something that freaked you out. That wasn't me.

Abigail smiles.
ABIGAIL
How about we both just forget it.

DOUGLAS
OH, I know just the thing for that.

Douglas motions for the waiter. The waiter comes over.

DOUGLAS
Can we see a wine menu please?

Again Abby smiles. The two settle in, the tension of the last few days starts to fade and two young lovers fall for each other all over again.

EXT - The Boardwalk

Abby and Douglas walk arm in arm along the beautiful boardwalk at night, the reflection of the moon dances off the water. The two are tipsy, giggling and holding each other tightly for stability as they stumble along.

ABIGAIL
You walk like a penguin.

DOUGLAS
Because you keep tripping me.

ABIGAIL
Lets swim home.

DOUGLAS
Uh-uh, I can't let you ruin your dress.

ABIGAIL
I'll take it off.

DOUGLAS
Ok lets swim.

Abigail grips Douglas by the shirt and pulls him in for a long kiss in the moonlight.

DOUGLAS
I love you Abby.

ABIGAIL
Take me home.

The two lovers kiss and then climb into a cab. Upon getting home their house is black, completely dark. They pair fumble to the door, finally getting it open. Douglas picks Abby up in his arms and carries her inside. The camera stays outside the house, the light in the window turning on just barely cuts through the black of the night.

Cont'd...

Sunday, November 30, 2014

Thomas Writes His First Movie: The first scare.


Previously:

http://apeday.blogspot.ca/2014/11/my-first-movie-script-is-about-guy-whos.html


http://apeday.blogspot.ca/2014/11/tom-writes-movie-include-sex.html

INT - BEDROOM - NIGHT

Inside the bedroom Abigale is sleeping alone, the room is very dark. It's eerily quiet. Abigale wakes up, she's expecting to have someone beside her. The house is silent except for sounds of movement coming from downstairs in the kitchen. Curious, Abigale gets up to see what Douglas is doing down there. The house creeks with every step as she creeps her way to the door. Just as she's about to open the door Douglas bursts through to doorway, startling them both. 


DOUGLAS
GAHHHH!

ABIGALE
AHHH!!

DOUGLAS
What are you doing out of bed?!

ABIGALE
I was trying to find out what you were doing out of bed!

DOUGLAS
I got up...I heard noises. I keep hearing noises.

ABIGALE
Houses make noise.

DOUGLAS
Which I am not used to hearing because I lived in the city. I am not used to this kind of quiet.

Abigale goes over to her bedside table and turns on a loud fan, the sound drowns out all the other noise. She climbs back into bed.

ABIGALE
Come on. Help me get back to sleep.

Douglas climbs back into bed and wraps Abby up in his arms, the two fall asleep.

 INT - KITCHEN - MORNING

Close up on Abigale's face. She's staring at something that disturbs her. Her face wears an expression of confusion and pained disgust. She's staring downward at something she see's on the counter. She's tense.

Douglas rounds the bottom of the stairs into the kitchen. 

DOUGLAS
Hey Sweety.

He startles Abigale who quickly reaches down and crumples up a piece of paper. 

DOUGLAS
Sorry. Are you ok?

ABIGALE
Are YOU ok?

DOUGLAS
Yeah, why?

ABIGALE
You'd just tell me if something was bothering you, right?

DOUGLAS
Of course Abby. What's wrong?

ABIGALE
...nothing. I trust you.

DOUGLAS
Good to know. 

Douglas looks at the expression on Abigale's face, he knows there's something on her mind but she's seems like she wants to move past it. He asks once more.

DOUGLAS
Are you ok?

She doesn't answer, she just hugs him.

DOUGLAS
Ok...I love you.

ABIGALE
I love you.

Douglas leaves the room, Abigale takes one more look at the crumpled piece of paper in her hand, it still makes her tense. She tears it up and throws is out. Determined to forget about it. Whatever it was shook her up.
CONT'D...



Monday, November 24, 2014

WTF?????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????


I just found the weirdest little side note to a story.

I am sitting here reading a wikipedia page about an old Egyptian army that went missing in the desert because that's the kind of thing I do and something really jumped out at me. It was the words "severed penis". I thought "heh...weird, I wasn't expecting that to come into play". The accompanying explanation was weirder than I thought...I thought maybe they were chopping off their penises (I just learned I had no idea what the plural of the word 'penis' was) for ceremonial reasons. I knew I was reading an article about a lost ancient Egyptian army and I knew severed penises (or penii) were a part of this story in some way and my mind's first conclusion was that of a weird, ancient penis ceremony where they chop them off, maybe as a sacrifice to the gods. That wasn't it.
In November 2009, two Italian archaeologists, Angelo and Alfredo Castiglioni, announced the discovery of human remains, tools and weapons which date to the era of the Persian army. These artifacts were located near Siwa Oasis.[16] According to these two archaeologists this is the first archaeological evidence of the story reported by Herodotus. While working in the area, the researchers noticed a half-buried pot and some human remains. Then the brothers spotted something really intriguing—what could have been a natural shelter. It was a rock about 35 meters (115 feet) long, 1.8 meters (5.9 feet) high and 3 meters (9.8 feet) deep. Such natural formations occur in the desert, but this large rock was the only one in a large area.[17]

However, these "two Italian archaeologists" presented their discoveries in a film rather than a scientific journal. Doubts have been raised because the Castiglioni brothers also happen to be the two filmmakers who produced five controversial African shockumentaries in the 1970s—including Addio ultimo uomo, Africa ama, and Africa dolce e selvaggia—films in which audiences saw unedited footage of the severing of a penis, the skinning of a human corpse, the deflowering of a girl with a stone phallus, and a group of hunters tearing apart an elephant’s carcass.[18]

The Secretary General of the Egyptian Supreme Council of Antiquities, Zahi Hawass, has said in a press release that media reports of this "are unfounded and misleading" and that "The Castiglioni brothers have not been granted permission by the SCA to excavate in Egypt, so anything they claim to find is not to be believed."[19]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cambyses_II#The_lost_army_of_Cambyses

Why? Why didn't I have the 'safe search' turned on when I googled "penis ritual"?

Wednesday, May 21, 2014

Tom's Rom-Com


To follow along with this story you can either scroll down a couple entries and read parts 1 and 2 or click HERE.

Con'd... 
 
Andy's sits up on the couch and picks up his phone. The light of the screen softly illuminates his face against the dark of the room. Andy takes a closer look at Cassie's profile, he glances through her profile and smiles. He flips through her pictures and smiles even harder. He looks at her message.

CASSIE
(text)
Hey. I am Cassie how are you?

NARRATOR/ANDY: This chick has to be fake, right? Beautiful women aren't sitting around on a Saturday night messaging strangers are they? They're supposed to be out, having strangers buy them drinks and throw themselves at them all night. I am being catfished, I know it. I shouldn't even bother responding...on the other hand those pictures...

ANDY
(text)
I am good, I am just chilling with friends. What about you?

CASSIE
(text)
I am just watching a movie right now with my friend. I was supposed to go to a club but we decided not to. Thank god!

ANDY
(text)
Why?

CASSIE
(text)
I hate clubs :)

NARRATOR/ANDY: Marry me. 

ANDY
(text)
Marry me.

CASSIE
(text)
Haha. K. 

ANDY
(text)
What are you watching?

CASSIE
(text)
Archer. Have you seen it?

NARRATOR/ANDY: Oh my god, I love her already. If this girl ends up being some dude then I am going to kill him.

ANDY
(text)
Love it!
Cassie?

CASSIE
(text)
What?

ANDY
CASSSSIE?

CASSIE
(text)
:) What???

ANDY
(text)
CASSSSSSSSSSSSSIEEEEEEEEE???

CASSIE
(text)
LOL Whaaaaaaaaaaaaaat?

ANDY
(text)
Danger zoneeeee.

CASSIE
(text)
HAHAHA OMG. LOL. YES!

NARRATOR/ANDY: Yeahhhhh, you kind of had to watch Archer to get that one but trust me, it was funny. AND SHE GOT IT! I made a dorky, obscure reference to an episode she may or may not have seen and she actually got it. She LOL'd. 

CASSIE
(text)
Haha. I don't want to keep you from your friends so I'll let you go. I just wanted to say hi.
Talk later? 

ANDY
(text)
Definitely

The phone fades back to black and the room falls dark again, Andy is alone and it's quiet. The soft light of the room just illuminates enough of Andy's face to see that the smile on his face still hasn't faded as he falls back to the couch.

Cont'd
 
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