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Showing posts with label relationship problems. Show all posts
Showing posts with label relationship problems. Show all posts

Sunday, March 15, 2015

TOM WRITES HIS FIRST MOVIE: Focus on the girl.

My name's Thomas. I am writing my first movie. I post everything as I go and collect it all HERE. Or look around a little, I've written shows, shorts, and articles all up in this blog before tackling this movie script business.

Douglas and Abby were madly in love. Douglas had just moved into her beautiful family home in the country, they were happy. Until one day she accused him of mutilating and violating her dolls and writing psychotic messages all over the walls. Douglas is pretty sure he didn't do that. Abby seems absolutely sure that he did. 
Here's today's page:



EXT - ABBY'S DAD'S HOUSE

Abby's car pulls into a small driveway outside of a modest one floor house. Inside the car she collects her things, before reaching for the door handle Abby stops herself and pulls down the overhead mirror. She see's her scar, it's looking more pronounced than before. The makeup has worn off a little. She starts to touch it up with some powder she takes from her bag.


HONK!

The sound of a carhorn behind her startles Abby, powder is flung into the air. Filling her lungs. She starts to choke and quickly exits the car.

BRYCE
Abby!

Bryce emerges from the truck behind Abby's and runs to her. 

BRYCE
Are you ok?

ABIGAIL
Yeah, pffffffffffttt...
That horn just made me jump and I got makeup in my mouth.

BRYCE
My fault. I am sorry.

ABIGAIL
It's ok.

Abigail hugs him.

ABIGAIL
Thank you so much for coming.

BRYCE
Of course Abby but...I don't think you should be doing this.

ABIGAIL
I knowww. My dad keep's saying that.

BRYCE
Your dad might be right.

ABIGAIL
My dad hasn't slept since I've been staying here. He stays up all night, everytime a car's headlights pass by he has to look out the window. If I want things to go back to normal then things have to go back to normal.

BRYCE
Yeah but...

ABIGAIL
I haven't heard from him in weeks, and we changed the locks. 

BRYCE
I don't like it.

ABIGAIL
I need to go home. 


Bryce can see that she means it. 

Off camera a door swings open. The pair turns to see Abigail's father Richard. He has a concerned look in his face.

INT - RICHARDS HOUSE

Inside Richard's small home boxes are everywhere, they're being filled by Abigail and Bryce. Richard isn't helping, he's actively trying to get her to stay.

RICHARD
One more week!

ABIGAIL
Will one more week actually make me any safer?

RICHARD
Yes! 

ABIGAIL
Ok. I get it, I am scared to go back too but I have to. I haven't been alone in weeks. I need to be by myself, I need to be somewhere where I can just cry and process everything that happened. I need to go home.

Richard relents.

RICHARD
I am going to be checking on you, keeping an eye out for anything. I'll drive past every couple hours,

ABIGAIL
You don't need to do that.

RICHARD
It's happening.

BRYCE
Abby?

Abigail turns her attention back to Bryce.

BRYCE
I think we're good here, I think we can get this in one trip.

Abby gives her father one last reassuring look before picking up her box and heading out the door.

On the drive up the men keep suspicious eyes on every car that passes.

INT - ABIGAIL'S HOUSE

Inside the house Abby waits with the boxes in the front hallway, Richard and Bryce are going through the house. They look under every bed and inside every closet. Bryce rushes back up from the basement holding his nose.

ABIGAIL
Told you.

Bryce takes a second to catch his breath.

BRYCE
I didn't see anything down there. Shelves, a cot, Christmas decorations, lots of garbage.

Richard emerges from one of the rooms and comes down the stairs.

RICHARD
I think we should do one more sweep, you check all the rooms I checked and I'll check yours.

ABIGAIL
You both looked everywhere. I saw you look underneath the dresser. He's not a hamster; dad.

RICHARD
Just for tonight maybe I should stay on the couch.

ABIGAIL
I love you dad. No.

RICHARD
Then let him.

BRYCE
I don't mind.

ABIGAIL
Thank you. But no. Please.

Bryce and Richard share a concerned but defeated look. Eventually both giving Abigail a strong hug and well wishes before departing. Abigail closes the door, alone in the house for the first time since the attack.

INT - ABIGAIL'S BEDROOM

Abigail settles into her bed, it's dark and very quiet. She's visibly nervous.

She hears a car approach, the sound startles her and she jumps out of bed and heads to the window. She's shaking. 

As the car pulls around the dark corner she feels relief when she recognizes that it belongs to Richard. Her dad's doing just what he said, he's keeping watch. She heads back to bed and forces her eyes closed. 

Darkness.

...CONT'D

Sunday, February 1, 2015

TOM WRITES HIS FIRST MOVIE: Everyone is against you.

I am writing my first movie...kinda winging it.

Brief Synopsis:
  
'Douglas wakes up one morning confronted by his girlfriend accusing him of tearing apart and molesting her favorite dolls. She thinks he did it, he thinks she did it. WTF?'

Here's everything so far:

http://tcqscripts.blogspot.ca/2014/12/i-am-not-weirdo.html 




INT - GRANT'S LIVING ROOM  - MORNING

Grant is passed out in his chair, beer bottles are all over the table in front of him. Douglas is sitting up, he's been awake all night. The morning sun is just starting to set.

Douglas has been up waiting, when the sun breaks he can't wait anymore. He gets up and takes the car keys from off of the table in front on Grant and makes his way out the front door. Outside the truck is parked haphazardly, half on the driveway and half on the front lawn. The back of the truck is smashed in, the bumper is dangling. Douglas pays it no mind, he climbs in and starts the engine, the bumper drags along the ground as he pulls away.

It's a long drive to Abagail's house outside the city, it takes a nervous hour and a half for him to finally reach the lonely turnoff onto Abagail's road. When his car makes the turn Douglas notices a police car pull up behind him. Soon he's flanked on either side by police cruisers demanding him to pull over. When Douglas complies he's told to get out of his vehicle.


POLICE OFFICER
STEP OUT OF THE VEHICLE WITH YOUR ARMS RAISED.

Douglas
What did I do???

POLICE OFFICER
STEP OUT NOW!

Douglas steps out of his truck and is immediately tackled and hand cuffed, he's violently picked up and thrown into the back of the police car.

INT - POLICE INTERROGATION ROOM

Douglas looks exhausted, he's sitting in a chair being grilled by a no nonsense cop. 

COP
Last night Abagail was attacked in her room while she slept.

DOUGLAS
What?

COP
Last night after you had your altercation with her and her father where you were asked to leave for doing...unsavory acts, she was left alone in her house where she claims someone hit her in her sleep.

DOUGLAS
Her father left her alone???

COP
He's the one who found her the next morning, with a broken eye socket and a mild concussion.

DOUGLAS
How could she do that to herself?

COP
Herself? 

DOUGLAS
She's sick. You have to help her.

COP
We are helping her. Infact we're looking at the prime suspect in this assault right now.

DOUGLAS
I wasn't there!

COP
No, according to your statement you were with your friend Grant all night. Yet when we found you, you were alone speeding towards Abagail's house.

DOUGLAS
Its still my home. All my stuff's there.

COP
Any dispute over your belongings is between you, her and the courts. The property belongs to Abagail, any attempt to access her property will be considered an intrusion.

DOUGLAS
Where's Abagail?

COP
Do you think I am going to give you that information. We're going to serve your with a restraining order that says you have to stay at least 50 feet away from her at all times. 

Douglas can't process all this information, his life has utterly crumbled in the last 24 hours. It shows.

COP
I will let you know that she's going to be ok. She's very shaken, she's very scared of you but she's going to be ok. We're here to make sure of it.

DOUGLAS
If you really think I did it then why don't you just arrest me already?

COP
The only reason you aren't in one of those cells right now is because she didn't see her attacker.

DOUGLAS
Are you sure there was an attacker?

COP
Are you asking me if I think she broke her own orbital bone and then went back to bed?
(he stares hard at Douglas)
No. I don't think that. I think you did it, I think you have a key, I think you came back in the middle of the night and I think you hit her with something with the intention to kill her.

DOUGLAS
But I'd know I am the most obvious suspect. You really think anyone could be that stupid?

COP
Not stupid. Like you said, sick.

DOUGLAS
What now?

COP
Like I told you, we don't have enough evidence to press charges. You can go.

Douglas stands up to be let out of the room.

COP
Make sure your leave your new address with our detectives before you leave, and make sure you never go anywhere near that girl or her house again. I am serious.

DOUGLAS
How do I get my things?

COP
Call a lawyer.

A buzzer sounds and the door out of the room opens, Douglas leaves. Still trying to process everything that's taken place. He's led out the front door back to his truck.

Cont'd...